You take us,
to where pain,
is plain,
planned : ordained,
open expansive oceans,
calm : subtle change,
darkness,
endangered,
instead of my in sane,
an end, angered swiftly,
turns into dew-dropped rain,
cut stems, angled, ripped free,
you ripple through me,
gently,
our wild tamed,
I claim:
your peace : my ease,
you aim:
our dream : belief,
a piece of we,
seek me.
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Very interesting word play & creative use of imagery. Wonderful work indeed!!!
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I could feel the mood… That’s what I seek for in poetry. To get lost in the poet’s feelings… Nice, well done!
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Excellent flow and use of adjectives to describe key elements throughout the poem. Once finished it demands reflection apart from the technique.
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Nice imagery and rhythm to this poem. Like wading slowly into a gently eddied ocean front. Nice work!
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Thank you as always for your words and thoughts!
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spectred & scriptured 
ink is free, so…